Est. ‘99
2006 10 October 10, 2006 (10200610)
What a beautiful town
Miles and miles of empty space
Completely full
Of absolutely nothing
Barren
Desolate
Desperate
No grass on the ground
No stars in the sky
The wind does not blow here
No one comes
No one goes
The air is filled with silence
The silence is filled with thought
The thought is filled with passion
The passion is filled with love
The ground is filled with dreams
The dreams are filled with regret
The regret is filled with rage
The rage is filled with hate
In the center of this town
In the middle of this nowhere
Lies a goddess
Welcome to my town
Welcome to my head
Welcome to my mind
Population: You
Some lovely imagery throughout this piece. The end kind of took me by surprise. I was reading it in the first person and then your last line threw me for a second. I wasn’t expecting that. I thought, “She got it wrong!” Then I got it. Nicely played.
First off, thank you very much. This poem came out a tad better than I originally intended. That was pretty much the kind of effect I was going for. I like my poetry to sound like it’s about one thing then throw a tiny bit of a curve ball.
Secondly, what do you mean by ‘She got it wrong!’? Please elaborate. I’m not 100% sure what you mean.
I mean the curve ball you threw at the end. I was expecting you to go one way and you went another. It took a second for my mind to catch what had just happened. I like unpredictability. Makes for interesting reading.
That’s what I thought you meant. I like unpredictability, too. If something is predictable, you can get half way through it and it’s pretty much over.
Plus, this brings up a minor issue that I did not know existed previously. I don’t think it ever came up before because most of the people who commented knew me personally.
I now know all of the reasons causing this issue and I am still contemplating how to deal with it.
I am a man.
That is not the issue. The issue is that I can now see how many readers may mistake me for a girl. Possibly even a lesbian. The image header is probably the biggest cause of this. Also, the entire lack of any masculinity in my blog at all. Plus, my writing may contribute to it. I think I’ll go make a post dedicated to this subject.